修改一篇英语文章请大家帮我改一改语法错误,最好在写奥运会志愿者那里在帮我加几句It is said that every heart has its own sorrow..yes,living in the world,we must experience lots of frustrations and difficulties,which

修改一篇英语文章请大家帮我改一改语法错误,最好在写奥运会志愿者那里在帮我加几句It is said that every heart has its own sorrow..yes,living in the world,we must experience lots of frustrations and difficulties,which
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It is said that every heart has its own sorrow..yes,living in the world,we must experience lots of frustrations and difficulties,which are unforeseen,traffic accident,floodwater,illness,etc.we can’t predict that when they will happen...when we have difficulties,we can turn to others,others' help are so important to us that I can’t imagine how the life will be without it.
Help is needed in everyone’s daily life.One day,I had a stomachache,I felt terrible.my best friend looked after me carefully.No words can express my thankfulness to her for the help .He offered me a cup of hot water,and told me to have the medicine.In addition,she also cleaned the classroom instead of me (that day,I was on duty).
All of above tell us a truth——everyone needs help .Do you know volunteers,they are a group of people who always help others without expecting any rewards.They devote their whole life to people who need help.They are heroes who are ordinary people but have noble-minded spirits ,such as the volunteers of the 2008 Olympic Games.They give helps to the 2008 Olympic Games,but ask nothing they only want to make a contribution to China.they set examples for us to help others.If someone asks me this question -----who is the greatest person in the world ,I will replied him without hesitation ----volunteers!
My friend’s help makes me moved and let me get out of trouble,and I think your help will make more and more people feel warm,everyone needs help,why don’t us be a warmhearted person,Give a helping hand as a volunteers and make a contribution to others .let’s create a better and nicer tomorrow together.

修改一篇英语文章请大家帮我改一改语法错误,最好在写奥运会志愿者那里在帮我加几句It is said that every heart has its own sorrow..yes,living in the world,we must experience lots of frustrations and difficulties,which
It is said that every heart has its own sorrow. Living in this world, we have to experience lots of frustrations and difficulties which can't be foreseen, traffic accidents, floodwater, illness,etc. we can’t predict when they will happen...And when we have difficulties, we can turn to others. Their help is so meaningful to us and just imagine how terrible our lives will be without it.
Help is needed in everyone’s daily life. Say, one day I had a stomachache and I felt terrible. One of my friends took care of me carefully and no words can express my thankfulness to her for helping. She reminded me to take the medicine on time. What's more, she cleaned the classroom instead of me when I was on duty.
All of above tell us a truth——everyone needs help .Do you know volunteers?they are a group of people who are always ready to help others without expecting any rewards. They devote their whole lives to help people who are bogged in difficulties or something. They are ordinary people but have noble-minded spirits. And the volunteers of the 2008 Olympic Games are such a group of people. They give helps to the 2008 Olympic Games but ask nothing for what they are doing and they only want to make a contribution to the Game and to their contry. they set examples for us to help others. If someone asks me who is the greatest person in the world , I will answer him without hesitation :volunteers!
My friend’s help makes me moved and let me get out of trouble and I think your help will make more and more people feel warm. everyone needs help. why don’t us be a warmhearted person, Give a helping hand as a volunteers and make a contribution to others .let’s hand in hand to create a better and nicer tomorrow together.
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It is said that every heart has its own sorrow. Yes, living in the world, we must experience lots of frustrations and difficulties, which are unpredictable, like earthquake, traffic accident, illness,etc. We can’t foresee when they will happen. When we meet difficulties, what we can do is to turn to others; others' help are so important to us that I can’t imagine how the life will be without it.
Everyone needs help in daily life. One day, I had a severe stomachache and I felt terrible.At that time, my best friend looked after me carefully. No words can express my gratitude to her for the help. He offered me a cup of hot water, and told me to take the medicine. In addition, she cleaned the classroom instead of me (I was on duty that day).
All of above tells us a truth——everyone needs help .Do you know volunteers？they are a group of people who always help others without expecting any rewards. They devote their whole life to people in trouble. They are heroes who are ordinary people but have noble-minded spirits, such as the volunteers of the 2008 Olympic Games. They give helps to the 2008 Olympic Games, but ask nothing ,their dreams are to make contribution to China. they set examples for us to help others. If someone asks me this question -----who is the greatest person in the world? I will reply without hesitation ----volunteers!
My friend’s help moved me deeply and let me get out of trouble, and I think your help will make more and more people feel warm. Since everyone needs help, why don’t we be a warmhearted person, offering our helping hands as a volunteers and make contribution to others. let’s create a better and nicer tomorrow together.

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