自己写了个小短文,错误多多,最好能简单说下为何错了,Today is Sunday and have no important things.My classmate ane I take exercise on the afternoon.First of all,we have plaied badmintoon for one hour.In fact,I think our level is no

自己写了个小短文,错误多多,最好能简单说下为何错了,Today is Sunday and have no important things.My classmate ane I take exercise on the afternoon.First of all,we have plaied badmintoon for one hour.In fact,I think our level is no
自己写了个小短文,错误多多,最好能简单说下为何错了,
Today is Sunday and have no important things.
My classmate ane I take exercise on the afternoon.
First of all,we have plaied badmintoon for one hour.In fact,I think our level is
not bad.Because I have felt very well when I hit every balls.and that I can use left hand
expect for right hand.My classmate is the same as me.
After that We have plaied chinese chess.Actually,we are not often play it.our level
is very low.Even nobody can see us over one minute.most of them only sighed deeply and
waved their heads and then go quick away.I fell some shy...Though we aren't good at
it,but we are good happy.Finally our score is 2:2.
Yeah!we are two happily ...
ps:最后想说臭棋娄子...不知道应该如何说...

自己写了个小短文,错误多多,最好能简单说下为何错了,Today is Sunday and have no important things.My classmate ane I take exercise on the afternoon.First of all,we have plaied badmintoon for one hour.In fact,I think our level is no
It was Sunday,nothing really special today.
My classmate came and we did exercise in the afternoon.
First,we played badminton for about one hour.I think we played quite well.I felt so good each time I hit the shuttlecock.I can even played with my left hand.And so did my classmate.
Next,we played Chinese chess.To tell you the truth,we don’t play it quite often.So we are not that good.When we played,nobody would bother to watch us play at all,not for even one minute.They stopped and went,signing,then shaking their heads.
I felt a little bit embarrassed.Though we weren’t good at
chess,the most important thing was that we did have a good time.Our final score was 2:2.(Tied)
Yeah!We are two happy chess pieces!
天哪地哪哇:1.首先表扬你自己把这篇故事写完.这是一篇完整的故事,有时间,有人物,有活动,有描述.下次若能再多加些自己的感受就更好了.
有几个小问题要注意:1.写当天做过的事,最好用过去时态:简单,清楚.很多时候中文表示已经做的事,在英文里并不是要用完成时态来表达的.
2.尽量多看英文原文.感觉你的表达方式很多还是用中文的思维表达方式,如水平底(level is low)等.今后看到好的词组,可以把它们记在一个小本子上,写作时拿出来看,就有现成的了.
3.写叙述文时,你可模仿这个模式:One day---First---Next---Then---Finally
4.你今天要记的单词:羽毛球shuttlecock,摇头shake(shook) one’s head
5.文章要有题目(title)
最后,keep up the good job!

Today is Sunday and I have no important things to do.
My classmate and I plan to take some exercises in the afternoon.
Firstly, we played badmintoon for one hour. In fact, I think our
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Today is Sunday and I have no important things to do.
My classmate and I plan to take some exercises in the afternoon.
Firstly, we played badmintoon for one hour. In fact, I think our
levels are not very bad. Because I felt very well when I hitted
every ball, and I could use my left hand instead of right hand.
My classmate is the same as me. After that We played Chinese
chess. Actually, we don't often play it since our level is very
low. Even nobody can see us over one minute. most of them only
sighed deeply and waved their heads and then go quickly away.
We feel some shy... Though we aren't good at
it, we are very happy. Finally our score is 2:2.
Yeah! we are so happy ...

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play的过去式不用变吧
还有feel是感官动词，一般不用现在完成时
“用左手，除了右手”那个except for用的不准确，建议用rather than
actually,后面那句are和play两个动词一起用错了，换成do
shy不可以用some形容
though和but不能同时用
你的英语水平不高，建议不要用过多语法复杂的时态
太ch...

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play的过去式不用变吧
还有feel是感官动词，一般不用现在完成时
“用左手，除了右手”那个except for用的不准确，建议用rather than
actually,后面那句are和play两个动词一起用错了，换成do
shy不可以用some形容
though和but不能同时用
你的英语水平不高，建议不要用过多语法复杂的时态
太chenglish了

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这是高中的短文改错吧!郁闷!不会做就直讲!
1.and和have间加I(缺主语)
2.on改为in(介词搭配不正确)
3.
4.删除and(逗号和and只可区其中之一)
5.
6.are改为do(不用be动词)
7.
8.some改为little(some不做副词)
9.把good删除(形容词用多了)
10.happ...

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这是高中的短文改错吧!郁闷!不会做就直讲!
1.and和have间加I(缺主语)
2.on改为in(介词搭配不正确)
3.
4.删除and(逗号和and只可区其中之一)
5.
6.are改为do(不用be动词)
7.
8.some改为little(some不做副词)
9.把good删除(形容词用多了)
10.happily改为happy（be动词后跟形容词）
其他的是有一定难度的,为了考验你,你就自己做吧!学习是为了自己,别人点得太破就没什么意义了,还是自己去寻觅吧!我相信你的能力! ~_~
再讲一句,剩下的3题你全打钩也会对一题！这样10题对8题也合格了！

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请附上中文原文，我来给你改。保证改好。